There are TWO versions of this poem:
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VERSION 1 (REVISED)
Cuevas' Fingernails
two year old child
at the hands of a king,
loses life, and his
fingernails,
his lover’s
round supple breasts
feed not only his mouth
but the mouth of a nation,
bitten by teeth of corruption.
hype hides the blood stains
on cotton.
she may as well not
have worn any at all.
Calito caught up
in flames.
perhaps over cable
you might hear his screams,
if he still had his tongue.
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VERSION 2 (ORIGINAL)
Cuevas' Fingernails
united states
of whatever;
land of the free to eat bagels
in the shadows of glass giants.
consume ‘til your form doesn’t fit
in a waiting room seat,
while a two year old child
at the hands of your god,
loses life, and his
fingernails,
his lover’s
round supple breasts
feed not only his mouth
but the mouth of your nation,
bitten by teeth of corruption.
hype hides the blood stains
on cotton.
she may as well not
have worn any at all.
Calito caught up
in flames.
perhaps over Conan
you might hear his screams,
if he still had his tongue.
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Please note:
I wanted to workshop this piece in the forum but the feedback I got didn't make me feel as though I needed to change this; If anything, it only made me realise how a particular opinion (an unpopular one at that) can have a negative impact on the audience and ultimately, the poem would not be received the way it could have been, if it were less offensive. So I have included the 'revised' version, which doesn't mention USA.















Comments
I share your view.
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Anyways, gr8 piece, nice 2 c u responded to our critiques and man oh man it mustve taken me like 30minutes just to read this.
The amount of effort & greatness u have put into this deserves a fav.
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