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Soul Mates


As time consumes impossible romance
A growing desperation wanes within
And visions of what could have been enhance
The tragedy of our two souls so twinned
I clutch at shadows, dreaming of your form
And melt beneath the ling’ring scent you leave
Still wond’ring why our fate must be forlorn
A futile love born from one fervid eve
     And here I suffer, silently I break
     My heart and mind colliding in your wake
©2004-2009 ~hojucult
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:iconmeic2:
Nicely written ... mellifluous and moving.

I can't think of any fault to criticise, nor changes to make.

I enjoyed reading the piece. :)

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:iconhojucult:
thank you :)

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:iconrhetoric-ritual:
:) Sad, but nicely written. Why not create another stanza, I guess you could say, and make it a Shakespearean sonnet. You've got the ababcdcd and gg part down... just get the efef. :D

I'm obsessed with Shakespearean sonnets. ^_^
:iconhojucult:
Then check out [link] and [link] and [link]

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:iconrhetoric-ritual:
Oh, I've read those, all. :D I try to read everything you submit, 'cause you actually have talent. Yes. *party hat for you* :hug:
:iconhojucult:
aawwwee thanks!! :hug:

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:iconentropolity:
As Feyerabend said, very sad.

But in a good way.

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:iconlexman:
Amazing !
With all its sadness, very beautiful !
:+fav: :clap:

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