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Violet Lust


Invisible fingers caress my lips
as I playfully swing, spread wings, take flight.
The breeze carries me on perfumed feathers,
while dewdrops shine, golden in honey light.

Creeping through canopies, rays watch intent,
as branches dance to the chime of laughter.
Bathe together in purple-veined petals,
Violet unfolds like eons hereafter.

This flower bed, found in woods, majestic,
bloom in moist meadows, \'neath mother\'s kind care,
yet here in passion-wrought dream garden, is
where lust-coloured heart shapes burgeon most fair.




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©2003-2009 ~hojucult
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Author's Comments

This was the winning entry for the ~poetrycafe flower contest! Wee!! Thanks everyone for voting :D (Big Grin)

Please note: this description is quite lengthy.. read the poem first and then come back to this. Trust me, you'll enjoy the poem much more that way..

I wanted to express a love between 2 people that (to use a cliché) blossoms like a flower. I know ‘love’ is so clichéd as it is, especially when using the flower metaphor, but it’s one that evokes such beautiful feelings and imagery. So I set the scene in a ‘secret garden’, which is metaphorical in itself because their love is ‘secret’. The subject in the poem is describing the atmosphere in the garden. I.e. describing the love that she and her lover make together.

Since this poem is about violets, I did some research on Violets - they are commonly found in moist meadows and damp woods, so I used this idea to show that they grow most beautifully in my secret garden.

‘Lust coloured’ is purple, ‘Heart shapes’ are the shapes of the petals (by definition) and ‘purple-veined’ is actually the texture of the petals. I wanted to use veins because it associates blood and neck and vampires LOL and I thought that was romantic. :P (Lick)

Form: I’ve used the rhyme scheme ABCB / DEFE / GHGI with 10 syllables per line.

Hope I haven’t spoiled this for you.. Enjoy..

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:iconthedreamghost:
Damn. Well, love is hardly 'cliche' when expressed so deeply. In a poem like this it actually seems quite unique. I find it interesting that of all the flowers you picked violets (another reason why this isn't even near 'cliche'). :) (Smile)

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På trollherrens tryne ny stiga ett grin
han höjer sin yxa han piskar sitt svin
ansikten vrids till ilska andra vrids till skräck
När trollens arme rider fram i en storm av blod och träck

Så faller man efter man
Så viner en vind av blod och lem
:iconshadowassassin:
I actually sent in votes for you, and once I clicked "send note," I realized how stupid I was, because I'm a staffer and I wasn't allowed to vote. Heh. If you had gotten those votes, you woulda won outright. Ah well.

Good stuff, in any case :) (Smile) .

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Suture Staff.
:iconoptumystic:
Hehe. I hate the word 'cliche'. It is so over used.
Anyway, I gave you most of my votes in the contest. This poem rocks!
:icondiscodann:
wow, hehe i really don't know what to say, i would have definitly voted for you if i would have seen it, keep it up :D (Big Grin)

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:iconazurainsides:
Wow. I have to say the thought that went into this was not overdone at all. this was an exquisite piece of writing. it reflected so much wisdom. and definitely broke the cliche pattern of love and flowers.. wow girl i am very impressed this is beautiful.
:icons-h-a-d-o-w:
wow, great job writing. You have lots of talent, I'm glad to hear you won too, keep up the great work!
:iconeternaltraveller:
Ahh, it's lovely to read some well written, light-hearted romantic poetry again :D (Big Grin) Just a small point ... your final stanza uses the same scheme as the first two, so maybe you should change that to GHIH in your description ;) (Wink)

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Fear is the darkroom where negatives are developed.
:iconjl:
Feeling a bit stupid 'cause I just wrote yesterday that 'A Day In Paris' might be one of the best of your poems that I read the last days... but having read this one... ;-) (Wink)

Great imagery, appeals to all senses. Beautiful choice of words... Wonderful!! :-) (Smile)

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